Envelope of Love Short film Likes & Dislikes

I would say writing this script has not been easy, mostly because of the re-writes I had to do to get it right.

I like the fact that something I wrote is being made into a short film, thats pretty cool and I like how smoothly it went recording it.

What I'm not happy with is that going thought the clips I can see the boom twice, which is annoying; I would have liked it if the Library wasn't filled with people or at lest very few people. Also I would have changed the way Tobie said "Who" It sounds like the person on the phone has told him the name and he saying who instead  "Who" as in wondering who he's suppose to give the envelope too.


If I could have re-written this the first time we got given this I would have liked to have made it more scarier, maybe even used my creepy doll.

I am happy with what I came up with both time, but I think I could have came up with something better, still paranormal and more scarier but the problem would most likely be the actors.